Author's Note: I actually don't have a lot to tell, but all I have to say is that this is in my perspective in a fictional story. The characters are all based on characters in my life. Most of them, are the same as in real life. Situation wise, name wise, life wise. So it might be bad, but it was really hard writing this. Please comment. Questions only if necessary.
He is trapped, my poor brother. Ever since my grandfather...I can't even talk about it. It was so sudden, I wasn't even there. Where was I when my poor grandfather, was tragically dying? I was in the village art contest. It was such a big deal to me. of course, I couldn't have known what was happening. I feel like it is partially my fault though. Now, Joshua has to live with his wicked mother. The evil witch of the village of Mt. Unpleasant. I wish that she could see how much Joshua needs to mourn with us. Me, my little sister, and my now fatherless mother. I have to be strong for my family. I am the last piece to the puzzle. I hold everyone together.
I have heard news from the village of Mt. Unpleasant. The witch, AKA my grandmother, is to be remarried to what everyone thinks is a werewolf. I am going to check it out for myself.
Deep heavy, panting I found out more than I need to know. The werewolf; Howard, is beating Joshua. I need to find help, I have contacted the city, they cannot help. I feel as though no one can help me, no one can help Joshua, or even my family. No one at all.
This story was cool, and it was kind of dark and mysterious which is cool, and also thing's like 'Mt. Unpleasant' added voice to it. So good job.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is very well-written. It is dramatic and very tragic with Joshua. This doesn't ruin the piece, but an author's note would have been nice to explain the inspiration and what you were thinking of for this piece. Other than that, awesome job Ellie. Your writing is so good every time and for every subject.
ReplyDeleteYes, indeed I shall put an author's note. Thank you Meg. :P
ReplyDeleteYeah I agree with Meg about the author's note so we know what the story is about because I had no idea. You had a lot of voice though and that made this piece fun to read even though it was sad.
ReplyDeleteThis was very effective! I am concerned about the poor boy! I know this is fictionalized, but is there some truth there? It certainly sounds so. Did this come after we spoke about monsters in literature? If so, I think that's really cool. I love the work as a piece of fiction, and was left wanting more, which is a really good sign!
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness, this is so sad! It's very well-written, like Meg said, and your voice and writing style was very clear. Overall, you did an awesome job. I hope writing everything out helped a bit.
ReplyDeleteThis piece might have been hard for you, but it was very strong. The emotions and everything is so intense and has a very original, powerful voice.
ReplyDeleteI agree. I liked how you included ware wolves after our class talked about that.
ReplyDeleteSorry I made a mistake-my computer isn't working! I meant to say that I liked how you included ware wolves after our class talked about what monsters symbolize.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Meg. And yes, though there is truth to this story, the story gets worse everyday. I don't think that I am going to continue this story. I don't really want the whole world to know my family problems. But thank you. :)
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