A stroll through the park
Sun shining, Umbrellas galore
Victorian Style Dresses flow through the grass
A stroll through the park
Picnics and couples
Small conversation
A stroll through the park
Trees sway in the wind
Kites soar overhead
A stroll through the park
The pond chirping with frogs
Fish and such
A stroll through the park
Spring, flowers
A sweet smelling breeze
A stroll through the park
A nice day with friends
One of few good moments
A stroll through the park
Again tomorrow?
I really like this piece! It's so creative, and it has lots of good poetic quality, unlike some poems that people write that don't feel right, or come out...clunky, or doesn't make sense. You also have some great description in this piece. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI really like the repetition in this piece. I agree, you put in some really nice descriptions in here. What inspired you to do this piece?
ReplyDeleteI don't really know, I think that it was because I was looking at a Monet piece when I wrote it. It just seemed like the park would fit all of the flowers in the picture.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy how there is a question at the end, leaving me to wonder, the way we often do as people, whether or not a good moment will be repeatable, or will it be the last time we can feel that way. I like it. Was this what you were going for?
ReplyDeleteYes, actually. I wanted it to be a one time experience, and like you said; wondering if it will be the last time you can feel that way. I am glad that I'm not the only one who interpreted that.
ReplyDeleteI really like your repetition. I also think the question is a good ending to your poem.
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